You, Immortalized In A Puddle in My Mind #etheree

in dribbles share yourself with another
to live forever through someone else
unveil treasures sheltered within
deep recesses of your heart
droplets of lasting love
awake forever
one memory
or many
for two 
joy
--
you
live on
in mem'ry
soft evensong
shine forth in sunlight
and in light of the moon
many treasures shared in drips
that grew wings, a soul-- a recall
alive forever in my mind's eye-- 
moon droplets in the puddles in your stead

 ©selmamartin.com

A fun poetry-form this Inverted Etheree (20 lines shaped like an hourglass) proved to be.

I probably spent way too much time with it and was ready to give up when boom, it fell into place — well, or so I think. I attempted a memorable message thanks to this week’s theme of ‘Immortality’ chosen by Merril D. Smith and gave it my all. Hope it worked.

It was written enthusiastically (started out enthusiastically, then waned a bit when doubt set in, and then– well, I got my second wind and now, you’re reading the result).

Enthusiastically written for Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge— a fun place where the enthusiasm is contagious and the love for syllabic poetry never ceases to amaze me. Thanks for welcoming me.

March 16, 2021, by Colleen M. Chesebro

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I’m a simple woman who dares to see the beauty in ordinary. I’d love to connect with you and like pen pals, I want something beautiful to blossom between us. Will you join me? Selma is my middle name. Its meaning—peaceful, complete, are euphoric affirmations I like to think of myself as having. They compliment the joy I feel when I write. I sincerely hope you decide to join me on my writing journey. I Wish You Miracles.

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This Post Has 4 Comments

Colleen M. Chesebro March 19, 2021 Reply

Selma, I love the double inverted Etheree, as well. It’s a much more open form, which leaves you more room to lay out your thoughts. Bravo! <3
judeitakali March 20, 2021 Reply

Gorgeously written.
Kathryn LeRoy March 24, 2021 Reply

I love the words and the image created by the inversion. Beautiful.
Jules March 29, 2021 Reply

I always say write what you enjoy – experimentation is good. There are some forms I just cannot do. I edit as I write, but rarely edit after I’ve finished a peace… I just move on.

Your piece reminds me of a loss of a relationship, could be a partner, or any other family member as well. I have had many losses – some too early. So I see some of those relationships in poetry like yours. 🙂