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GloPoWriMo 2023, Day Three: Ah! Sun-Flower, Call On My Wallflower

Prompt On Day Three: Rewrite, Replace

Ah Sun-flower! weary of time, 
Who countest the steps of the Sun:
Seeking after that sweet golden clime
Where the travellers journey is done.

Where the Youth pined away with desire,
And the pale Virgin shrouded in snow:
Arise from their graves and aspire,
Where my Sun-flower wishes to go.

Ah! Sun-flower
BY WILLIAM BLAKE

***

Caramba, wallflower! recharged by sloth,
Who ignores the steps of the strident Sun:
Hid from intense ignimbrite climes
Where no soul ever wants to roam.

Only to find the old thrill in inertia,
The tanned, deflowered lass naked in the rain:
Die of slog in her nascences and belly-flops,
Quirky land-- inumbrate flowers refuse to stay.

© selma
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What a great prompt. Gave me a chance to borrow William Blake’s mind for a
few hours. Yes, it took me a few hours to try to match the master.

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Thanks so much for reading, and happy national poetry writing month.

Selma Martin
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  1. rajkkhoja

    Lovely Shiney Sun flower. Amazing poem written.

    1. Selma Martin

      So pleased that you found this one with the flowers lovely, Raj. Thanks for the valuable support. Bless you.

      1. rajkkhoja

        You are most welcome!

  2. kim881

    Your poem made me smile, Selma, especially ‘Caramba’, which reminded me of Bart Simpson!
    Not an easy exercise, you made some interesting word choices. I especially like ‘intense ignimbrite climes’ and the ‘inumbrate flowers’ that refuse to stay.

    1. Selma Martin

      Caramba! It Carries a lot of weight in annoyance pound, dear Kim. 🙃 it’s quite the opposite of Ah … glad it made you smile. And the other words too big to use a second time. But they worked to give the opposite effect of the tender Blake poem I chose. At least I think so 🤣 thanks for reading and supporting my efforts with you lovely comment. Blessings.

    1. Selma Martin

      Thanks, I thought so too. And it fit nicely into Blake’s poem imagery. Xo

    1. Selma Martin

      Thanks Tricia. Thanks for the support, dearie. Xoxo

  3. memadtwo

    the old thrill in inertia–and persistent, too. (K)

    1. Selma Martin

      Yes, fits like a glove sometimes. Stay away from it, K— as if you needed to be reminded. Poets don’t go there. 😜 blessings.

    1. Selma Martin

      To hear this from you is a delight. I’ll make sure it doesn’t climb to my head. Blessings, Punam. Xoxo

    1. Selma Martin

      To hear you say that, Yvie, 💗
      Thanks. You are a gem. Xoxo

  4. Romana Iorga

    Ooh, Blake is a personal favorite of mine. I subscribe to the “thrill in inertia,” which often happens when you read or write: the body doesn’t move but the mind gallops.

    1. Selma Martin

      The mind gallops, indeed. I know it from experience too. Thanks for reading/commenting, Romana dear. Blessing you.

  5. Gloria

    Point taken with a knowing smile for I am a wallflower on many social occassions 🙂

    1. Selma Martin

      Glad to be the reminder you needed, Gloria. 😜 xoxo

  6. Sadje

    So well written Selma. 👏🏼

  7. Sunra Rainz

    “The tanned, deflowered lass naked in the rain” – goodness me, that took a saucy turn I didn’t expect! Ha ha 😀 Loving your work, Selma 🙂

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