I hear the lament—
alas and alack at once
get out of your way!
when trying to free your mind
often the mountain is you
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I hear the lament—
when trying to free your mind
get out of your way!
alas and alack at once
often the mountain is you
© selma
[which flows better? I feel #2 is clearer; or should there be a #3?]
Written for What Do You See, # 224- February 5, 2024, for Sadje: The image shows graffiti painted on the metallic side of a bridge that reads FREE YOUR MIND.
Image from #WDYS — credit: Suefeldberg (istockphoto)
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#2, at least for me! <3
Thanks
#1
🤗 you’re #1 my friend!
No, you are!❤️🙃
yes, we are the biggest block to ourselves – best said in #3 in my mind
sorry, #2 )
I see you mean 2 🤓
Thanks
We are that!
I like the flow of the second one better. But both hold a potent message. Thanks for joining in.
Thanks for the prompt, Sadje. My first participation this year 🙇🏽♀️
Thanks 🙏🏼
#1
Got’ya 💕
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Well said, Selma. And in powerful poetry.
New profile pic—I like it 💕
Thanks for the comment, dear friend. Xo
You’re welcome, Selma! I don’t like changing profile pics and confusing everyone’s feed but it’s more up-to-date at least 😉. Glad you like it!
I like it. Lots
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I like the flow and message of 2 best. I am a master at standing in my own way too! Well done.
Thanks for checking me out, Mason. I appreciate it so much. Please come again. 😉
You’re welcome, Selma.
I think this is amazing, we are our own worst enemies.
We are our own worst enemies. We be must be more mindful of this. Xoxo
I agree that #2 flows best. Excellent thought, either version. (K)
Thanks so much, dear K. Blessings.
Very nicely done, Selma! I like the flow of version #2 better. I keep stumbling between lines 2 and 3 of version #1 as I get in my own way trying to read through it. 🙂
alas and alack— at once, get out of your way! 😜 thanks, Stephan xo
Stephen 🙇🏽♀️
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” often the mountain is you”
Do truly stated
Blessings.
Starting with “alas and alack” works for me. #1
Poetic truth in both!
Thanks a ton for reading and offering this lovely bit of you. Appreciate you. 🙇🏽♀️
You’re very welcome expressive you! 😊✨
Oooohhh love this! Both are really well but #2 feels a little better for me
#2. 👍🏽 💕
Selma, this, as always, is insightful. I love how you capture the internal struggle to overcome obstacles and find liberation within oneself.
~David
I completely agree, we are the mountain, the barrier for our own freedom.
Yes. And sad that sometimes we don’t even notice. Thanks for commenting, Elizabeth. Xo